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"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARGH!" Everyone looked over in shock to see that one of Mato's fleash-eating toasters had latched itself onto Jake's hand. "Getitoffgetitoffgetitoff!" he scream, flailing his arm about wildly to get it off. With help from Sarah and Jessica, he was able to force it off and Sarah threw it to the floor, whereupon Jake took a hammer and proceeded to smash the little blighter to pieces.
"Hey!" Mato exclaimed, "that toaster only had one day left 'till- Argh!" He ducked as the hammer flew through the air, just where his head had been.
"What did I tell you about making flesh-eating toaster, old man!?" Jake shouted in anger.
"Um... keep... doing it?"
"NO!" the whole group exclaimed, even Lucia, to Rebecca's surprise. Then the beatings began. Once Mato was an unrecognisable heap on the floor, Lucia left the room to get a broom to clean up the mess and the others finished up their meal and put their plates in the sink for Dawn to clean.
The girls headed to the living room while Jake waited for Lucia to return and help her dispose of the body. She returned, broom in hand, with a dopey smile on her face. "Lucia, you okay?" he asked cautiously.
"Yes, I feel wonderful, Jake," she replied dreamily.
He knew something was wrong but he didn't really care. "Just give me the broom."
"Yes, Jake. Anything for you, Jake," she replied, handing it over.
Now he cared. "Lucia, are you hypnotized?" he asked, already knowing the answer.
"Yes, Jake. I am hypnotized."
"It was Dawn, wasn't it?"
"I don't remember, Jake. They told me to forget. I'm sorry." She seemed sad as she said this, despite the expression on her face not changing.
"It doesn't matter. Just wake up." It was a shame the other girls were expecting them in the living room soon. He'd have had some fun with the entranced beauty otherwise.
"Huh?" Lucia looked around, confused. "Wasn't I just getting a broom?"
"Yeah, here it is," Jake replied, showing her the broom. "Someone hypnotized you while you were there."
"They did?" the angel replied thoughtfully. "I don't remember that."
"Well, yeah, that's because they told you not to..."
"Jake, did you work that out all by yourself? You're so clever!" she beamed. Although he knew she was being sincere (it's kinda her thing), it somehow sounded like she was talking down to him. He just sighed as Lucia looked on, confused.
"Hey!" Mato exclaimed, "that toaster only had one day left 'till- Argh!" He ducked as the hammer flew through the air, just where his head had been.
"What did I tell you about making flesh-eating toaster, old man!?" Jake shouted in anger.
"Um... keep... doing it?"
"NO!" the whole group exclaimed, even Lucia, to Rebecca's surprise. Then the beatings began. Once Mato was an unrecognisable heap on the floor, Lucia left the room to get a broom to clean up the mess and the others finished up their meal and put their plates in the sink for Dawn to clean.
The girls headed to the living room while Jake waited for Lucia to return and help her dispose of the body. She returned, broom in hand, with a dopey smile on her face. "Lucia, you okay?" he asked cautiously.
"Yes, I feel wonderful, Jake," she replied dreamily.
He knew something was wrong but he didn't really care. "Just give me the broom."
"Yes, Jake. Anything for you, Jake," she replied, handing it over.
Now he cared. "Lucia, are you hypnotized?" he asked, already knowing the answer.
"Yes, Jake. I am hypnotized."
"It was Dawn, wasn't it?"
"I don't remember, Jake. They told me to forget. I'm sorry." She seemed sad as she said this, despite the expression on her face not changing.
"It doesn't matter. Just wake up." It was a shame the other girls were expecting them in the living room soon. He'd have had some fun with the entranced beauty otherwise.
"Huh?" Lucia looked around, confused. "Wasn't I just getting a broom?"
"Yeah, here it is," Jake replied, showing her the broom. "Someone hypnotized you while you were there."
"They did?" the angel replied thoughtfully. "I don't remember that."
"Well, yeah, that's because they told you not to..."
"Jake, did you work that out all by yourself? You're so clever!" she beamed. Although he knew she was being sincere (it's kinda her thing), it somehow sounded like she was talking down to him. He just sighed as Lucia looked on, confused.
This is a scene I cut from my first HBL story, Family Matters. I believe it was on the day Dawn gets Rebecca under her sway but I'm not too sure. I'm not sure why I removed it; might have been to make things a bit more concise. I definitely removed it pretty early on, since the version I had onfile still had Rebecca listed as Claire.
In the two years since, I've been trying to find a place for it in another story but I've just not been able to fit it in. As such, I decided to just release it standalone.
Looking back on it, I think you can see how my writing style, at least as far as HBL is concerned, has changed quite a bit since then, especially toning down on the lame jokes like Mato's line. There's also Lucia using contractions, something neither she, nor hypnotized characters, do in my works anymore.
Just assume this scene does happen during the story at some point but it's not that important.
In the two years since, I've been trying to find a place for it in another story but I've just not been able to fit it in. As such, I decided to just release it standalone.
Looking back on it, I think you can see how my writing style, at least as far as HBL is concerned, has changed quite a bit since then, especially toning down on the lame jokes like Mato's line. There's also Lucia using contractions, something neither she, nor hypnotized characters, do in my works anymore.
Just assume this scene does happen during the story at some point but it's not that important.
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Lucia makes any situation cute.